New novel, Vessel, free on blog
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andyroo said:
funkyrobot said:
Finished Vessel. Ending ok, but did leave me wanting a little more.
I don't know if this is the case, but it seemed like the ending was a little rushed and a little too easy. Everyone just seemed too happy, especially Sally.
Oh well. Maybe I was expecting a big explosion or fight and I'm a little disappointed that this didn't happen.
Update! Update! I've changed the ending. Just spend the last eight hours rewriting, and I think the improvements are well worth it. I've also rejigged quite a bit of the plot to keep some things secret for longer. Would you like to read it?I don't know if this is the case, but it seemed like the ending was a little rushed and a little too easy. Everyone just seemed too happy, especially Sally.
Oh well. Maybe I was expecting a big explosion or fight and I'm a little disappointed that this didn't happen.
Epilogue reads better, but if I'm really honest I (personally) think the Sean bit is still a bit too easy for Sally. Unless I have missed this, wouldn't it be a good idea to have Mikhail tell Sally that someone will help her. Say something along the lines of even though he (Mikhail) can't be there for her, someone (Sean) will appear soon who can be? I think that would make Sally's acceptance of Sean more believable.
If the above has been done and I haven't noticed it, let me know.
andyroo said:
Another post up. This time I talk about trying to get an agent: http://andrewjamesmorgan.com
Interesting read. Thanks for that. funkyrobot said:
I've taken a look. I've re-read the last two chapters (28 and the epilogue). Are they the ones you have changed?
Epilogue reads better, but if I'm really honest I (personally) think the Sean bit is still a bit too easy for Sally. Unless I have missed this, wouldn't it be a good idea to have Mikhail tell Sally that someone will help her. Say something along the lines of even though he (Mikhail) can't be there for her, someone (Sean) will appear soon who can be? I think that would make Sally's acceptance of Sean more believable.
If the above has been done and I haven't noticed it, let me know.
My apologies, I should have been clearer: I uploaded a new epilogue a while ago, but I've also re-written a lot of the end of the book, too. Because the changes are quite heavy, it's too much work to re-upload to the blog. Since then, I've also changed a fair amount of the earlier portions of the book, so it would probably make sense for me to show you when it's done!Epilogue reads better, but if I'm really honest I (personally) think the Sean bit is still a bit too easy for Sally. Unless I have missed this, wouldn't it be a good idea to have Mikhail tell Sally that someone will help her. Say something along the lines of even though he (Mikhail) can't be there for her, someone (Sean) will appear soon who can be? I think that would make Sally's acceptance of Sean more believable.
If the above has been done and I haven't noticed it, let me know.
Thanks for your continuing comments, though, they're very helpful
andyroo said:
funkyrobot said:
I've taken a look. I've re-read the last two chapters (28 and the epilogue). Are they the ones you have changed?
Epilogue reads better, but if I'm really honest I (personally) think the Sean bit is still a bit too easy for Sally. Unless I have missed this, wouldn't it be a good idea to have Mikhail tell Sally that someone will help her. Say something along the lines of even though he (Mikhail) can't be there for her, someone (Sean) will appear soon who can be? I think that would make Sally's acceptance of Sean more believable.
If the above has been done and I haven't noticed it, let me know.
My apologies, I should have been clearer: I uploaded a new epilogue a while ago, but I've also re-written a lot of the end of the book, too. Because the changes are quite heavy, it's too much work to re-upload to the blog. Since then, I've also changed a fair amount of the earlier portions of the book, so it would probably make sense for me to show you when it's done!Epilogue reads better, but if I'm really honest I (personally) think the Sean bit is still a bit too easy for Sally. Unless I have missed this, wouldn't it be a good idea to have Mikhail tell Sally that someone will help her. Say something along the lines of even though he (Mikhail) can't be there for her, someone (Sean) will appear soon who can be? I think that would make Sally's acceptance of Sean more believable.
If the above has been done and I haven't noticed it, let me know.
Thanks for your continuing comments, though, they're very helpful
Ok, I'll take a look when you are done.
I've added a new post to my blog. This week I talk about how I think new authors should view the road to success: http://andrewjamesmorgan.com
Today I take a good long look at editing, and why it's so important: http://andrewjamesmorgan.com
funkyrobot said:
Today, I read your blog. Thanks.
Oh yes:
'This also highlights why sorting the rhythm during the copy-edit stage is so important, because the brain cant fix that and gets suck when scanning ahead, jarring the reader from the experience.'
I did say I was no good at proofreading Oh yes:
'This also highlights why sorting the rhythm during the copy-edit stage is so important, because the brain cant fix that and gets suck when scanning ahead, jarring the reader from the experience.'
andyroo said:
funkyrobot said:
Today, I read your blog. Thanks.
Oh yes:
'This also highlights why sorting the rhythm during the copy-edit stage is so important, because the brain cant fix that and gets suck when scanning ahead, jarring the reader from the experience.'
I did say I was no good at proofreading Oh yes:
'This also highlights why sorting the rhythm during the copy-edit stage is so important, because the brain cant fix that and gets suck when scanning ahead, jarring the reader from the experience.'
ETA: Sorry, damn space barsticks .....
In this blog post, I talk about my upcoming book launch promotion strategy. Oh, and the edit of Vessel is completely finished! http://andrewjamesmorgan.com
andyroo said:
In this blog post, I talk about my upcoming book launch promotion strategy. Oh, and the edit of Vessel is completely finished! http://andrewjamesmorgan.com
Thanks. Will take a look. I will get chance sometime soon to read the new version. I'm just going through a job change at the moment.
http://www.pistonheads.com/gassing/topic.asp?h=0&a...
Oh yes. Good luck with the book launch.
funkyrobot said:
Thanks. Will take a look.
I will get chance sometime soon to read the new version. I'm just going through a job change at the moment.
http://www.pistonheads.com/gassing/topic.asp?h=0&a...
Oh yes. Good luck with the book launch.
I made a similar big leap career-wise, and the hardest thing was the buildup. Once you've started your first day, that horrible feeling will all be over. Staying where you are doesn't sound like an option, so that only leaves the new job left as a choice! I will get chance sometime soon to read the new version. I'm just going through a job change at the moment.
http://www.pistonheads.com/gassing/topic.asp?h=0&a...
Oh yes. Good luck with the book launch.
Sounds like a good move to me
andyroo said:
funkyrobot said:
Thanks. Will take a look.
I will get chance sometime soon to read the new version. I'm just going through a job change at the moment.
http://www.pistonheads.com/gassing/topic.asp?h=0&a...
Oh yes. Good luck with the book launch.
I made a similar big leap career-wise, and the hardest thing was the buildup. Once you've started your first day, that horrible feeling will all be over. Staying where you are doesn't sound like an option, so that only leaves the new job left as a choice! I will get chance sometime soon to read the new version. I'm just going through a job change at the moment.
http://www.pistonheads.com/gassing/topic.asp?h=0&a...
Oh yes. Good luck with the book launch.
Sounds like a good move to me
I really must get on with some writing soon too.
A publication date for Vessel has been set! http://andrewjamesmorgan.com
Anyone interested in writing their own book might find this insightful: http://andrewjamesmorgan.com
Good read, thanks.
It's interesting to see how over planning a story can effectively throttle it. As someone who likes to plan, I'll need to try and not go overboard when I finally get round to doing my own writing.
Speaking of writing, I had a good chat about it with my fiancee on Saturday. We were talking in the car on the way back from cot and pram shopping and I made another story up and told her it. I seem to do this a lot and she told me to bloomin well write them down.
My problem is that I'm not that confident and I think that everything I do is rubbish. I do need to get over this before I get anywhere really.
It's interesting to see how over planning a story can effectively throttle it. As someone who likes to plan, I'll need to try and not go overboard when I finally get round to doing my own writing.
Speaking of writing, I had a good chat about it with my fiancee on Saturday. We were talking in the car on the way back from cot and pram shopping and I made another story up and told her it. I seem to do this a lot and she told me to bloomin well write them down.
My problem is that I'm not that confident and I think that everything I do is rubbish. I do need to get over this before I get anywhere really.
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