Anyone want to be a literary critic?

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First draft of the first chapter of a story I am messing about with...

It was going to be the prologue to the main story but it got longer and longer so I made it Chapter 1.


All reviews are welcome...don't be gentle..!

Cheers.


http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/Hawkwood/133972...

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Thanks!

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Cheers. The quotes appeared on the writerscafe website for some reason - I didn't put them there!

Chapter one is really just a prologue I might chop it out completely if it doesn't work Chapter two is the original Chapter One with more of a story and less scene setting. Did you make it that far?