NSFW - looking for some constructive criticism
NSFW - looking for some constructive criticism
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stigmundfreud

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Tuesday 29th May 2007
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Please no one show vixpy this thread




originally raw (colour) then processed. Lighting was provided by 2 stellar 300 heads with gold reflection umbrellas.

all images are copyright of myself and no reproduction or use is permitt


Edited by stigmundfreud on Tuesday 29th May 13:31


Edited by stigmundfreud on Tuesday 29th May 14:37


Edited by stigmundfreud on Wednesday 6th June 18:51

crmcatee

5,808 posts

258 months

Tuesday 29th May 2007
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don't know what sort of criticism you're looking for but in the first one is she sleeping ?


Seasider

12,728 posts

280 months

Tuesday 29th May 2007
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Can you host them away from flickr & photobucket pls wink
paperbag

stigmundfreud

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Tuesday 29th May 2007
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Genuine why??


Seasider

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Tuesday 29th May 2007
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stigmundfreud said:
Genuine why??
Those hosts are websensed at work frown

stigmundfreud

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Tuesday 29th May 2007
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crmcatee said:
don't know what sort of criticism you're looking for but in the first one is she sleeping ?
just to see if I am going in the right direction. I'm new to all this so still practicing the lighting etc

and you know full well she isn't sleeping!

stigmundfreud

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Tuesday 29th May 2007
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Seasider said:
stigmundfreud said:
Genuine why??
Those hosts are websensed at work frown
ah I see, I see

will pm you when I rehost biggrin

Marki

15,763 posts

301 months

Tuesday 29th May 2007
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crmcatee said:
don't know what sort of criticism you're looking for but in the first one is she sleeping ?
Or have a stomache ache hehe

stigmundfreud

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Tuesday 29th May 2007
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Marki said:
crmcatee said:
don't know what sort of criticism you're looking for but in the first one is she sleeping ?
Or have a stomache ache hehe
pfft Pie and Piston ahoy!

Seasider

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Tuesday 29th May 2007
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stigmundfreud said:
Seasider said:
stigmundfreud said:
Genuine why??
Those hosts are websensed at work frown
ah I see, I see

will pm you when I rehost biggrin
It’s ok, just looked on my phone smile screens not that clear but look they fine to me biggrin

TonyHetherington

32,091 posts

281 months

Tuesday 29th May 2007
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I like the setting with the black background etc and parts of her look really good...but other parts of her look overexposed or even over processed?! Top of her legs in both shots for example

Good work though biggrin

Edited by TonyHetherington on Tuesday 29th May 17:19

stigmundfreud

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Tuesday 29th May 2007
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cheers tony

poah

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259 months

Tuesday 29th May 2007
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poses are not really workign for me but the lighting looks fine, you've not under/overexposed anything. one thing I would say is not to use dark clothes if you are using a dark background and a gray colour rather than black or white normally looks best for monochrome.

TonyHetherington

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281 months

Tuesday 29th May 2007
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It was those bits at the top of her thighs/side of waist I was thinking of, Poah - it looks washed out and featureless (to my novice eyes). Perhaps that's more like you mentioned using more rich colours, perhaps, than overexposing, but you see my point...?

HotTotty

807 posts

238 months

Tuesday 29th May 2007
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Her stocking tops need to be lower down her thigh, as they currently unbalance her leg. Think a solid shoe on her foot would also help.

Over all for me the composition doesn't work as she doesn't appear comfotable with the pose.



Edited by HotTotty on Tuesday 29th May 20:31

poah

2,142 posts

259 months

Tuesday 29th May 2007
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what focal length where you using she looks slightly distorted


stockings are perfect hight TBH

GetCarter

31,313 posts

310 months

Tuesday 29th May 2007
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Photos look OK to me. IMHO the poses look a bit too much like a road traffic accident.

stigmundfreud

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Tuesday 29th May 2007
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cheers guys

I'll have to check on the focal length but the distortion is more due to the first image should be rotated 90 degrees anti clockwise. That image was taken with me stood over her shooting down, unfortunately my house is bare at the minute so had nothing really to stand on to get higher.

The second one was taken with her facing with her legs at the background and raised vertical, taken with me standing slightly back and looking down.

EmmaP

11,758 posts

270 months

Tuesday 29th May 2007
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There is nothing sexy or erotic about the poses. She looks really uncomfortable and awkward. Her facial expressions are wrong too as they look contrived. The stockings are too high and the skin at the top of her legs is far too light, as is the skin under her right breast in the first shot. It is almost devoid of any detail. It is the lightest part of the picture so your eye is drawn there.

The backdrop doesn't work either as she appears to be almost floating. Try satin next time so that you have some lovely lines to add to the composition, drawing your eye around the frame and possibly to echo the curves of her body. It is a bit more sensuous than black velvet or the fabric you selected.

My best advice is to have a look at the work of Helmut Newton and other greats of nude and erotic photography who have, over the years, contributed to the Pirelli calendar.

When working with an inexperienced model it may be really helpful to show her pictures to indicate what you are seeking to achieve in terms of pose and composition.

Not bad for a first attempt at a very difficult subject. With all the advice on here and some more research, you should get some better results next time.



Edited by EmmaP on Tuesday 29th May 23:22

stigmundfreud

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Tuesday 29th May 2007
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emma cheers

I actually ramped up the contrast levels as its my personal preference, the original you do get teh lines quite nicely so will go back and re work

personally I disagree with her looking uncomfy but thats down to each persons view