Is this correct english?

[jamoor]

said:

We use the latest tools and technology to
ensure that every order is tracked from the
moment we received it until the moment it
arrives at your door

I swear it's meant to be receive rather than received.

[ih8thisname]

I would say so...

Could do with some punctuation though!

[E36GUY]

I think it you're right.

Or it should read "from the moment we have received it...."

That's correct but wouldn't be how you'd write it in said text.

[mgtony]

No. To be correct, it should be English not english.

[okgo]

jamoor said:

said:

We use the latest tools and technology to
ensure that every order is tracked from the
moment we receive it, to the moment it
arrives at your door

I swear it's meant to be receive rather than received.

Is how I would say it..

[maix27]

jamoor said:

said:

We use the latest tools and technology to
ensure that every order is tracked from the
moment we received it until the moment it
arrives at your door

I swear it's meant to be receive rather than received.

you're right.

There should be a full stop on the end too.

[welshbikerduck]

jamoor said:

said:

We use the latest tools and technology to
ensure that every order is tracked from the
moment we received it until the moment it
arrives at your door

I swear it's meant to be receive rather than received.

It should be yes. Why the question?

[CommanderJameson]

haworthlloyd1 said:

jamoor said:

said:

We use the latest tools and technology to
ensure that every order is tracked, from the
moment it is received, until the moment it
arrives at your door.

I swear it's meant to be receive rather than received.

I think the above is a little better - possibly without the comma's.

[Bee_Jay]

CommanderJameson said:

haworthlloyd1 said:

jamoor said:

said:

We use the latest tools and technology to
ensure that every order is tracked, from the
moment it is received, until the moment it
arrives at your door.

I swear it's meant to be receive rather than received.

I think the above is a little better - possibly without the comma's.

[mr.man]

"We use" is present tense so all other verbs should follow suit.
"Received" is past tense so that is clearly incorrect.

[Jasandjules]

It just doesn't look right for some reason.

Why not re-arrange the words a little, and cut it down some.

"We use the latest technology to track the process of your order from receipt until the product is delivered to your door".

Edited by Jasandjules on Thursday 18th September 19:47

[Simpo Two]

jamoor said:

said:

We use the latest tools and technology to
ensure that every order is tracked from the
moment we received it until the moment it
arrives at your door

I think it's too wordy. People will have no idea what the 'latest tools & technology' are - it's marketing padding that stands no examination. 'Innovative solutions yada' etc.

Keep it simple + feature/benefit:

'Every order is tracked from start to finish so you'll always know where your goods are'.

That way you get the benefit as well as the feature. And yes, I write scripts

[jamoor]

Simpo Two said:

jamoor said:

said:

We use the latest tools and technology to
ensure that every order is tracked from the
moment we received it until the moment it
arrives at your door

I think it's too wordy. People will have no idea what the 'latest tools & technology' are - it's marketing padding that stands no examination. 'Innovative solutions yada' etc.

Keep it simple + feature/benefit:

'Every order is tracked from start to finish so you'll always know where your goods are'.

That way you get the benefit as well as the feature. And yes, I write scripts

Dont suppose you could look over something for me

[Simpo Two]

jamoor said:

Dont suppose you could look over something for me

No problem - bung it over. Might not get back till Monday though as have three busy days in a row.

[Promised Land]

jamoor said:

We use the latest tools and technology to
ensure that every order is tracked from the
moment we received it until the moment it
arrives at your door

Don't forget to put underneath it the Polish translation.

My u¿ywaæ ten ostatni narzêdzia i technologia wobec
zapewniæ ów ka¿dy klasa jest wyœledzony z chwila
my otrzymywaæ ono do ten chwila ono
przybywaæ przy twój drzwi

Edited by Promised Land on Thursday 18th September 20:11

[crofty1984]

jamoor said:

said:

We use the latest tools and technology to
ensure that every order is tracked from the
moment we received it until the moment it
arrives at your door

I swear it's meant to be receive rather than received.

Should be receive.

If you're going after someone's business, then you're referring to a package that you haven't been given yet. Therefore to use the past tense is incorrect.
You wouldn't put "the moment it arrived at your door" either, unless you were actually giving the person in question a report on how you delivered their package last week.

[crofty1984]

CommanderJameson said:

haworthlloyd1 said:

jamoor said:

said:

We use the latest tools and technology to
ensure that every order is tracked, from the
moment it is received, until the moment it
arrives at your door.

I swear it's meant to be receive rather than received.

I think the above is a little better - possibly without the comma's.

The apostropolice will get you!

[jamoor]

Promised Land said:

jamoor said:

We use the latest tools and technology to
ensure that every order is tracked from the
moment we received it until the moment it
arrives at your door

Don't forget to put underneath it the Polish translation.

My u¿ywaæ ten ostatni narzêdzia i technologia wobec
zapewniæ ów ka¿dy klasa jest wyœledzony z chwila
my otrzymywaæ ono do ten chwila ono
przybywaæ przy twój drzwi

Edited by Promised Land on Thursday 18th September 20:11

Yuk she maaash