I'd really appreciate some feedback on this please!

[vit4]

A brief background, 18 now, played in a band with a mate from when we were 12 until end 2009 after a pretty disastrous gig at Barfly and some general disputes


Considering getting it back together now, more mature etc. I play in a working pub band (gig 3-5 times a month) and whilst I love it, the originals is what really gets me. This is the kind of music we wrote, I'd really like it if I could get a bit of feedback! This was written when we were 14ish, and I don't think it's that bad actually But yeah, feedback from other ears is always good whether it's positive, negative or pure destructive!

http://www.soundclick.com/player/single_player.cfm...
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[davepoth]

I must confess it sounds fairly similar to a lot of demos I used to end up using as coasters when I was running gigs at my student union. But you're still young (and were younger when you wrote that) so you have time on your side.

You need to be able to take something memorable away from a song after listening to it to make it great, be it a awesome riff, a soaring chorus, even a killer drum break. This song didn't have anything unique IMO.

One trap that a lot of bands get into is only listening to the music they like. By doing that you rob yourself of inspiration - most of the bands you like will have listened to a lot of the music you like. It helps to listen to really obtuse stuff (I'm currently listening to a lot of Ragtime, for no real reason) just to get a different perspective on your writing.

I used to walk into the studio and say "you know what, this bit needs to sound more like Adam Ant", or "we should definitely do disco drums on this one", even though I'm no fan of Adam Ant or Disco. But it drew something new and a bit different in, which made us stand out a little. It also got me sacked from the band in the end, but that's another story entirely.