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Trying to write an ad for my car.
This is what I have so far:-
Cypress Green Metallic Suzuki GV2000 S/T
One owner from new (me)
Full Suzuki Service History and most receipts
Approx 57K miles
Chrome Side Steps and Rear bar
Colour Coded "bull" bar
OZ Alloy Wheels sitting on 6 month old Bridgestone X-Road Tyres
Clarion CD/Radio
Electric Windows and Mirrors
Rear Head Rests and Seatbelts
S/S exhaust by Blueflame with lifetime guarentee (the original exhausts rust very easily so replaced it)
Some scratches around the key ignition area
MOT/Tax is due in June.
Also serviced by TVR
Private Plate and Spare Wheel Cover are NOT Included.
Sold as seen
So what have I missed off...? apart from price.
Claire
This is what I have so far:-
Cypress Green Metallic Suzuki GV2000 S/T
One owner from new (me)
Full Suzuki Service History and most receipts
Approx 57K miles
Chrome Side Steps and Rear bar
Colour Coded "bull" bar
OZ Alloy Wheels sitting on 6 month old Bridgestone X-Road Tyres
Clarion CD/Radio
Electric Windows and Mirrors
Rear Head Rests and Seatbelts
S/S exhaust by Blueflame with lifetime guarentee (the original exhausts rust very easily so replaced it)
Some scratches around the key ignition area
MOT/Tax is due in June.
Also serviced by TVR
Private Plate and Spare Wheel Cover are NOT Included.
Sold as seen
So what have I missed off...? apart from price.
Claire
Oh crikey. Its not going on PH, as its not the type of car that would be sold on here (unfortunately)
I just wanted some advice so I can sell the thing so I can buy a new one and it seems like there is something missing from the ad but didnt know what.
As soon as I get the wording - I will delete the post.
Claire
>> Edited by Gaffer on Tuesday 8th March 20:38
I just wanted some advice so I can sell the thing so I can buy a new one and it seems like there is something missing from the ad but didnt know what.
As soon as I get the wording - I will delete the post.
Claire
>> Edited by Gaffer on Tuesday 8th March 20:38
Gaffer said:
Trying to write an ad for my car.
This is what I have so far:-
Cypress Green Metallic Suzuki GV2000 S/T
One owner from new (me)
Full Suzuki Service History and most receipts
Approx 57K miles
Chrome Side Steps and Rear bar
Colour Coded "bull" bar
OZ Alloy Wheels sitting on 6 month old Bridgestone X-Road Tyres
Clarion CD/Radio
Electric Windows and Mirrors
Rear Head Rests and Seatbelts
S/S exhaust by Blueflame with lifetime guarentee (the original exhausts rust very easily so replaced it)
Some scratches around the key ignition area
MOT/Tax is due in June.
Also serviced by TVR
Private Plate and Spare Wheel Cover are NOT Included.
Sold as seen
So what have I missed off...? apart from price.
Claire
For sale Suzuki GV2000 soft top jeepy type thingy. I've owned this little cutey from new and have tootled along with her for 57000 miles in total pleasure. She has lots of little nick nacks and glitzy adornments which make her the bargain that she is now. Plenty of buttons to push and switches to flick to while away those mind numbing hours on the motorways, or you could take advantage of her stonking sound system. Poor darling has a little scratch near her ignition barrel. I must admit it was done by myself being impatient and was totally unprovoked! To make up for it I had a nice man from TVR splash ever loving care and attention on her for the day (well it must be the equivalent of a health spa for a car though). Can't bear to part with such a darling but she's forever going topless as soon as the sun pops out from behind a cloud. So being the reserved person I must bid her a tearful farewell.
wolf1 said:
For sale Suzuki GV2000 soft top jeepy type thingy. I've owned this little cutey from new and have tootled along with her for 57000 miles in total pleasure. She has lots of little nick nacks and glitzy adornments which make her the bargain that she is now. Plenty of buttons to push and switches to flick to while away those mind numbing hours on the motorways, or you could take advantage of her stonking sound system. Poor darling has a little scratch near her ignition barrel. I must admit it was done by myself being impatient and was totally unprovoked! To make up for it I had a nice man from TVR splash ever loving care and attention on her for the day (well it must be the equivalent of a health spa for a car though). Can't bear to part with such a darling but she's forever going topless as soon as the sun pops out from behind a cloud. So being the reserved person I must bid her a tearful farewell.
I like that a lot but the amp and sub are coming out. They can listen to the exhaust instead. 
Sold as seen? Surely all private sales are thus? Where does it say you have to give a warranty? To me it sounds like you're trying to hde something, I'd miss that bit out.
As an aside, I once bought a Yamaha Passola twist'n'go from some friends who ran a bike breakers. This thing was lime green and still had the shopping baskets front and rear. Cost me £12. I used to turn up at local biker meets on it, in full leathers, and the guys would fall about laughing, then fall over each other trying to make the bloody thing wheelie
The point being that the sales invoice read:
"Sold as shit, never to be seen again, it makes me ill in the morning"
As an aside, I once bought a Yamaha Passola twist'n'go from some friends who ran a bike breakers. This thing was lime green and still had the shopping baskets front and rear. Cost me £12. I used to turn up at local biker meets on it, in full leathers, and the guys would fall about laughing, then fall over each other trying to make the bloody thing wheelie
The point being that the sales invoice read:
"Sold as shit, never to be seen again, it makes me ill in the morning"
Gaffer said:
MOT/Tax is due in June.
Personally I would term this slightly differently - ie Mot and Tax to June 2005. Sounds a little more positive perhaps!?
Sold as seen
As already said, this almost implies that you expect something to go wrong. Probably best to delete as its not necessary.
PS - Good luck with the sale
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